It sounds like you’re trying to invite people to a spiritually themed gathering. The idea is clear, but the wording is a bit hard to follow and may turn some people away. Tightening it up and making it more grounded will help others understand what they’re actually being invited to.

Here’s a cleaner version you could use:

Join us for a gentle Rose Gathering by the sea 🌹

We’ll come together in a heart-centered space to relax, connect, and share in a peaceful atmosphere. The gathering includes:
• A mindful sea swim or dip
• Warm cacao by the shore
• A sacred rose initiation ceremony

This is a space to release worries, slow down, and connect with like-minded women in a supportive and uplifting environment.

All are welcome—bring an open heart and a willingness to simply be.

Location and time: Barna County Galeay in a teach na mara, in the mystical galway setting.. a day fo rest and revitalising for yourself. in a sacred divine space.